v1.0 by Kenneth J. Dickson
With a partner, read over the essay and answer the following questions.Stage 1I. Write 2 things you really like about the other piece.
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Stage 2
II. Use these questions to help you think about each of the points.
Give lots of information to explain your reasons.
1. What do you think of the basic idea? Is it related to
‘influences on our life’?
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Very Clear |
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Quite Clear |
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A little fuzzy |
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Somewhat Fuzzy |
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Random |
2. Can you find the location of the thesis sentence in the first
paragraph?
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Does the thesis sentence cover everything in the essay?
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What other problems exist with the thesis sentence? Try to rewrite
the thesis sentence.
3. Does each paragraph talk about one main idea? Are they
organized in some order? Are they directly related to thesis sentence?
Explain.
4. Does the writing have enough supporting information/examples/illustrations?
What kind of information should the writer give us if there isn’t so much?
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Loads |
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Quite a lot |
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Some |
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Very Few |
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None really |
5. How does the writer introduce or conclude the essay?
How could the writer start/finish the essay if he or she has problems?
Suggest one way for each.
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Advice to the writer.Homework: Go home and evaluate the feedback you have been given
by both the teacher and your classmates. Think about how to improve
your first draft. If necessary, plan it in more detail, and write
a CLEAR thesis, before you rewrite your first draft. This is copyright by the author.
You are free to use this for classroom use only. Any other use requires the author’s permission.
2000/11/30